In the 3rd and final draft I have done my best to effectively improve and finish the script. The script is finished now with most improvements sorted as of now. As one of my pieces of feedback was to name some minor characters I have done so by naming Veteran, Jeff in the new draft so the director wont get confused with the character between the other extras. I have corrected as many spelling errors as I could and have fixed some of the old dialogue to look and sound more realistic. Overall I am pleased with how this all ended up, there could be some improvements still however but overall the script is a fairly decent one for the BBC.
